Drafting, drafting, drafting, and I look up to find I have quite literally just written the words "You have no power over me."
Ha!
Oh, yes, they're staying. They amuse me too much to cut them. I'll cut them in a later draft. It'll be a nice surprise, when I'm revising, to find a laugh buried in the script.
Leigh Dragoon [14 August 2007 @ 2:48 pm]
God, I love that phrase. Those words amuse me muchly, too. And I love the idea of leaving a surprise for yourself.
1damselfly [14 August 2007 @ 3:03 pm]
My first drafts are full of surprises for revising. I am constantly leaving little comments along the side of the manuscript. Mostly they're dull enough, "find a better word", that sort of thing. Sometimes, like today, they're a great opportunity to laugh. I keep imagining that line in a girl's voice (naturally enough), only the character who spouted it is supposed to a manly soldier type.
2Liz Adkins [15 August 2007 @ 3:07 pm]
It made me smile when I thought it was your protagonist. But from a manly soldier, it's even better.
3damselfly [15 August 2007 @ 5:11 pm]
Hee. It's from Sidonius, who would be washing his own mouth out with soap, if only I would let him.
4Liz Adkins [17 August 2007 @ 3:19 pm]
Hm. Does that make the ambivalently sexy anti-hero usurper king a goblin king? In tights? Mmmm…
5damselfly [17 August 2007 @ 4:57 pm]
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